Mark Scheme & Model Answer (Edexcel GCSE English Literature)

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Unseen Poetry: Mark Scheme & Model Answer

The unseen poetry comparison essay for the Edexcel English Literature course is probably the most complex piece of writing you will have to undertake at GCSE. This can seem challenging enough when comparing two poems you’ve been taught from your anthology, but for Section B part (b) you have the additional difficulty of having to compare two poems you’ve probably never seen before! However, there are ways to simplify the process, and some simple exam hacks to make this task more manageable. The best way to improve any essay is to know how you are assessed, and what skills you are being assessed on. This page has been created to give you a sense of what examiners are looking for in a full-mark response to the unseen poetry question. It contains:

  • Overview
  • Mark scheme
  • Example task
  • Model answer
  • Unannotated model answer 

Overview

In part (b) of Section B you will be asked to compare two unseen contemporary poems. This can seem daunting, especially as you have to write about two poems you have not come across before in one essay. However, examiners just want to see your ideas and opinions on the poems you have just read. The guide below will enable you to best express these ideas and opinions in a way that will gain the highest marks.

You are more likely to perform well on the paper if you keep in mind the dominant assessment objectives for this question. For this section you are assessed on AO1 and AO2: you are awarded 8 marks for AO1 and 12 marks for AO2.

Mark scheme

The mark scheme for the Edexcel GCSE English Literature specification can seem intimidating at first. However, it is crucial that you have a thorough understanding of the mark scheme because, in doing so, you will know exactly what you are being assessed on and how to improve.

AO1 and AO2 are assessed as part of Section B part (b). The weighting for this question is:

  • AO1 - 40%
  • AO2 - 60% 

Here is a simple version of the Edexcel mark scheme for the unseen poetry question on Paper 2 of your Edexcel GCSE:

AO1

  • Read, understand and respond to texts. Students should be able to:
    • Maintain a critical style and develop an informed personal response
    • Use textual references, including quotations, to support and illustrate interpretations

AO2

  • Analyse the language, form and structure used by a writer to create meanings and effects, using relevant subject terminology where appropriate

Example task

The examination requires you to answer one question comparing two unseen contemporary poems. The following task is based on the May 2018 Edexcel GCSE English Literature Paper 2 exam. The commentary is designed to highlight how to structure your response and integrate all aspects of the assessment objectives into your response. 

We will now explore how you can create an informed and coherent response using an example of a question from part (b) of Paper 2’s Section B. First, let’s read through the poems below:

Poem 1:

The Month of May

             ‘O! the month of May, the merry month of May … ’ – Thomas Dekker (d. 1632)

The month of May, the merry month of May,

So long awaited, and so quickly past.

The winter’s over, and it’s time to play.

 

I saw a hundred shades of green today

And everything that Man made was outclassed.

The month of May, the merry month of May.

 

Now hello pink and white and farewell grey.

My spirits are no longer overcast.

The winter’s over and it’s time to play.

 

Sing ‘Fa la la la la,’ I dare to say,

(Tried being modern but it didn’t last)

‘The month of May, the merry month of May.’

 

I don’t know how much longer I can stay.

The summers come, the summers go so fast,

And soon there will be no more time to play.

 

So carpe diem*, gather buds, make hay.

The world is glorious. Compare, contrast

December with the merry month of May.

Now is the time, now is the time to play.

                                                                      -       Wendy Cope

Poem 2:

British Weather

It is the merry month of May,

when everything is cold and grey,

the rain is dripping from the trees and

life is like a long disease,


the storm clouds hover round like ghouls*,

the birds all sing, because they’re fools,

and beds of optimistic flowers

are beaten down by thunder showers,

 

under a weak and watery sun

nothing seems to be much fun –

 exciting as a piece of string,

this is the marvellous British Spring!

                                                                        -       Gavin Ewart

Question:

Compare the ways the writers present the month of May in Poem 1: ‘The Month of May’ and Poem 2: ‘British Weather’. 

In your answer, you should compare:

  • the ideas in the poems
  • the poets’ use of language
  • the poets’ use of form and structure

 Use evidence from the poems to support your comparison.

When structuring your essay, the most important thing to do is to have a clear introductory sentence (also known as a “topic sentence”) at the beginning of every paragraph. This topic sentence must make one clear point that is directly related to the focus of the question. Here are a couple of great topic sentences that explore how the month of May is depicted in both of the above poems.

Question focus

Compare the ways the writers present the month of May

Topic sentence

Cope presents the month of May as a time to be savoured, whereas Ewart presents the month as something to be endured.

Topic sentence

While Cope presents her speaker as waiting in eager anticipation of May, Ewart presents the month as boring and seemingly never-ending.

When writing the rest of your paragraph, all your points then should relate to your topic sentence. It is also a great idea to maintain a focus on the key term of the question (here, “the way the writers present the month of May”) throughout your argument.

Question focus

Compare the ways the writers present the month of May

Topic sentence

Cope presents the month of May as a time to be savoured, whereas Ewart presents the month as something to be endured.

Analysis

Both poets present their thoughts about the “merry month of May” and both use a version of this line from Thomas Dekker. In ‘The Month of May’, this alliterative phrase conveys a sincere sense of joy and celebration which is associated with the month of May when, after the long winter, “spirits are no longer overcast”. Cope also suggests that the month of May is “quickly past” and needs to be enjoyed while it lasts. In contrast, in ‘British Weather’ Ewart states that the month of May “is cold and grey” and wet, suggesting that even in what should be the height of spring the weather is drab and dull. The poet indicates that life in the month of May is “like a long disease”, suggesting that it is to be avoided or, at best, tolerated. Here, in contrast to the way it is used in Cope’s poem, the phrase “the merry month of May” is used ironically: for Ewart, it is not “merry” at all, and is certainly not a time to be savoured.

Model Answer

Below you will find a full-mark, Grade 9 model answer for this task. The commentary labelled in each section of the essay illustrates how and why it would be awarded Grade 9.

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Unannotated model answer

Both Ewart and Cope have chosen to explore the month of May within their respective poems and offer contrasting perspectives. While Cope paints a vibrant and cheerful image of May, Ewart adopts a more pessimistic stance.  

Cope presents the month of May as a time to be savoured, whereas Ewart presents the month as something to be endured. Both poets present their thoughts about the “merry month of May” and both use a version of this line from Thomas Dekker. In ‘The Month of May’, this alliterative phrase conveys a sincere sense of joy and celebration which is associated with the month of May when, after the long winter, “spirits are no longer overcast”. Cope also suggests that the month of May is “quickly past” and needs to be enjoyed while it lasts. In contrast, in ‘British Weather’ Ewart states that the month of May “is cold and grey” and wet, suggesting that even in what should be the height of spring the weather is drab and dull. The poet indicates that life in the month of May is “like a long disease”, suggesting that it is to be avoided or, at best, tolerated. Here, in contrast to the way it is used in Cope’s poem, the phrase “the merry month of May” is used ironically: for Ewart, it is not “merry” at all, and is certainly not a time to be savoured.

In contrast to Ewart’s presentation, Cope describes the month of May as being full of beauty, colour and life. The colour imagery of “I saw a hundred shades of green” and “hello pink and white and farewell grey” suggest that the speaker in Cope’s poem believes that May ushers in a vibrancy that is missing from the “grey” that has come before. While the month of May makes the speaker in Cope’s poem feel happy and optimistic, through phrases such as “spirits are no longer overcast”, “The world is glorious”, Ewart’s speaker suggests that “nothing seems to be much fun” and that even though flowers (normally a symbol of life and happiness) are trying to be “optimistic”, they are “beaten down” by the bad weather. Indeed ‘British Weather’ ends with sarcasm and irony: “this is the marvellous British Spring!” Therefore, although both poets use colour imagery in their poems, Cope does this to highlight the energy and exuberance of May, while Ewart sees everything as “grey”.

While Cope presents her speaker as waiting in eager anticipation of May, Ewart presents the month as boring and seemingly never-ending, In ‘The Month of May’ Cope uses antithesis to emphasise how quickly the month of May seems to pass: “So long awaited, and so quickly past”; “summers come, the summers go”. The phrase “so long awaited” underscores the eager anticipation and perhaps even longing for the arrival of the month. In comparison, Ewart employs.onomatopoeia (“dripping”) to reflect the relentless, yet slow-moving, sound of the rain. This could highlight how interminable the month feels to the speaker. Moreover, similes are used throughout the poem to further enhance this feeling of boredom: “life is like a long disease”, “like ghouls”, and “exciting as a piece of string”.

Both poets use formal structure in their poems to convey their differing perspectives on the month of May. ‘The Month of May’ is a villanelle consisting of 19 lines of five tercets and a quatrain; there are two refrains and two repeated rhymes and “The month of May” is repeated throughout the poem to emphasise the joy that the month brings each year. Parentheses are also used to provide an aside when the poet talks directly to the reader in a relaxed and humorous way: “(Tried to be modern but it didn’t last)”. This reflects the speaker’s joy and sense of ease when thinking about May. In contrast, ‘British Weather’ is written in three quatrains, each one consisting of two pairs of rhyming couplets. The poem is written in one sentence, punctuated with commas and a dash, and this is used to convey the poet’s spontaneous trail of negative thoughts about the month and the weather. This use of one long continuous sentence could also reflect the speaker’s ideas about how the month of May seems incredibly dull and never-ending.

While Cope presents an optimistic and happy view of the month of May, Ewart is more pessimistic: the speaker in ‘The Month of May’ sees May as representing life, colour and joy, while for Ewart’s speaker, the month is something negative to be endured.

Commentary

  • Ensure that your writing is informed by perceptive comparisons and contrasts
  • Include topic sentences that set out the point of each of your paragraphs:
    • Your topic sentences should be short, and should not include analysis or quotations
  • Demonstrate a range of similarities and/or differences between both poems
  • Aim to give an assured personal response
  • Make discerning references to both poems
  • Demonstrate a perceptive grasp of language, form and structure and their effects



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Kate Lee

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Kate has over 12 years of teaching experience as a Head of English and as a private tutor. Having also worked at the exam board AQA and in educational publishing, she's been writing educational resources to support learners in their exams throughout her career. She's passionate about helping students achieve their potential by developing their literacy and exam skills.