Part B: Mark Scheme & Model Answer (Edexcel GCSE English Literature)

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19th Century Novel: Mark Scheme & Model Answer

The best way to improve any essay is to know how you are assessed, and what skills you are being assessed on. This page has been created to give you a sense of what examiners are looking for in a full-mark response. It contains: 

  • Overview
  • Mark scheme
  • Example task
  • Model answer
  • Unannotated model answer 

Overview

In Section A part (b) you are required to have knowledge of the whole text and you will need to demonstrate your comprehension, critical reading and analytical skills. You are more likely to perform well on the paper if you keep in mind that the main assessment objective for this question is AO1.

Mark Scheme

The mark scheme for the Edexcel GCSE English Literature specification can seem intimidating at first. However, it is crucial that you have a thorough understanding of the mark scheme because, in doing so, you will know exactly what you are being assessed on and how to improve.

AO1 is assessed as part of Section A part (b) therefore the weighting for this question is:

  • AO1 - 100%

Here is a simple version of the Edexcel mark scheme for the 19th-century novel question: 

AO1

  • Read, understand and respond to texts. Students should be able to:
    • Maintain a critical style and develop an informed personal response
    • Use textual references, including quotations, to support and illustrate interpretations

Example task

The following task is based on the May 2019 Edexcel GCSE English Literature Paper 2 exam, and is based on a question on A Christmas Carol by Charles Dickens. However, the commentary is designed to highlight how to structure your response and integrate all aspects of the assessment objectives, and therefore the model could be applied to any of the novels in the examination. 

In Section A part (b) you need to draw on your knowledge of the text and give examples from the novel. 

We will now explore how you can create an informed and coherent argument using an example of a question from Section A part (b). First, let’s read through the question below:

Question:

In this extract, Scrooge is afraid. 

Explain how fear is portrayed elsewhere in the novel. 

In your answer, you must consider: 

  • who shows fear
  • when fear is shown

After we have identified the focus of the essay question - “how fear is portrayed” - we can move on to organising our argument. When structuring your essay, the most important thing to do is to have a clear introductory sentence (also known as a “topic sentence”) at the beginning of every paragraph. This topic sentence must make one clear point that is directly related to the focus of the question. Here are a couple of great topic sentences that explore different aspects of fear, and the way in which Dickens explores it within A Christmas Carol:

Question focus


How fear is portrayed elsewhere in the novel

Topic sentence

Dickens presents fear as a catalyst for change in the novel. Scrooge’s initial encounter with the Ghost of Jacob Marley instils great fear within him, and it is this profound terror that prompts Scrooge’s transformation.

Topic sentence

Similarly, Scrooge’s encounters with the Ghosts of Christmas Past, Christmas Present and Christmas Yet to Come all fill him with a deep sense of trepidation, which shock him into a state of self-reflection. 

When writing the rest of your paragraph, all your points then should relate to your topic sentence. It is also a great idea to maintain a focus on the key term of the question (here, “fear”) throughout your argument. 

Question focus


How fear is portrayed elsewhere in the novel

Topic sentence

Dickens presents fear as a catalyst for change in the novel. Scrooge’s initial encounter with the Ghost of Jacob Marley instils great fear within him, and it is this profound terror that prompts Scrooge’s transformation.

Analysis

The face that appears on the door’s knocker is described as being disturbing: “its livid colour, made it horrible”. Despite his determination to conceal his fear, Scrooge’s actions betray his apprehension as he meticulously searches every corner of his house for signs of an intruder and he even goes so far to double-lock “himself in, which was not his custom”. This conveys the extent of his unease and paranoia. As the bell of the clock begins to swing, Scrooge finds himself filled with “inexplicable dread”. Scrooge initially attempts to maintain his composure. However, when the ghost shakes his chains at him and emits a frightful cry, Scrooge’s façade crumbles and he collapses to the floor, overcome by terror. Scrooge’s tormented state is conveyed through his actions as he pleads for mercy. Marley acts as a catalyst for the transformation of Scrooge: he has a “terrible sensation” after Marley’s visit and it is this fear which first prompts his desire to change.

Model Answer

Below you will find a full-mark, Grade 9 model answer for this task. The commentary labelled in each section of the essay illustrates how and why it would be awarded grade 9. Despite the fact it is an answer to a question on A Christmas Carol, the commentary is relevant to any of the novels you may have studied because it is modelling how to structure an answer to gain the highest number of marks for AO1.

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Unannotated model answer

Dickens predominantly presents fear in A Christmas Carol through his protagonist Scrooge. Scrooge is fearful of the supernatural, as evident through his encounters with the ghosts, but he is also fearful of change. Ironically, it is his fear of the supernatural which will inspire a change in him. Dickens also portrays fear through his employee Bob Cratchit, who, in contrast to Scrooge, is fearful of the consequences of poverty and illness.

Dickens presents fear as a catalyst for change in the novel. Scrooge’s initial encounter with the Ghost of Jacob Marley instils great fear within him, and it is this profound terror that prompts Scrooge’s transformation. The face that appears on the door’s knocker is described as being disturbing: “its livid colour, made it horrible”. Despite his determination to conceal his fear, Scrooge’s actions betray his apprehension as he meticulously searches every corner of his house for signs of an intruder and he even goes so far to double-lock “himself in, which was not his custom”. This conveys the extent of his unease and paranoia. As the bell of the clock begins to swing, Scrooge finds himself filled with “inexplicable dread”. Scrooge initially attempts to maintain his composure. However, when the ghost shakes his chains at him and emits a frightful cry, Scrooge’s façade crumbles and he collapses to the floor, overcome by terror. Scrooge’s tormented state is conveyed through his actions as he pleads for mercy. Marley acts as a catalyst for the transformation of Scrooge: he has a “terrible sensation” after Marley’s visit and it is this fear which first prompts his desire to change.

Similarly, Scrooge’s encounters with the Ghosts of Christmas Past, Christmas Present and Christmas Yet to Come all fill him with a deep sense of trepidation, which shock him into a state of self-reflection. Scrooge’s fear is heighted as he awaits the arrival of the Ghost of Christmas Past. The anticipation of the ghost’s visit weighs heavily on him and his anxiety and fear mounts as he nervously counts down the tolling bells of the clock. His fear intensifies when he feels himself suspended in mid-air and Dickens portrays his vulnerability. When the Ghost of Christmas Present first appears, Scrooge is commanded to gaze upon the ghost’s face. Despite his fear, Scrooge obeys, only to be shocked by what he sees. Their journey over the “fearful range of rocks” to the lighthouse further unsettles Scrooge as he is confronted with the reality of human suffering and deprivation through the characters of Ignorance and Want. At the sight of the children, Scrooge “started back, appalled” and he recoils in horror at their ghastly appearance. The fear of these visions spark Scrooge into reflecting on his life, and the choices he has made.

His encounter with the Ghost of Christmas Yet to Come further plunges Scrooge into a state of terror, further unsettling him and making him question his prior beliefs. As he observes Mrs Dibler and Joe haggling over Scrooge’s bedding. Dickens describes that Scrooge “listened to this dialogue in horror” and recoiled in terror. His horror increases when he is confronted with the sight of his own corpse and the gruesome imagery of rats gnawing at his body makes Scrooge horrified by the prospect of his own death. The ghost is an ominous and sombre figure and is in contrast to the youthful Ghost of Christmas Past and the jolly Ghost of Christmas Present and Scrooge declares: “I fear you more than any spectre I have seen.” The abrupt departure of the ghost leaves Scrooge shaken and unsettled to his core.

Dickens also depicts Bob Cratchit as a character who is also fearful of the consequences of poverty and illness. His fear of his employer permeates his work environment. He is too fearful to ask Scrooge for more coal to replenish his fire and instead tries “to warm himself at the candle”. The oppressive atmosphere of fear and intimidation by Scrooge leaves Bob feeling powerless and resigned to his fate. The fear of losing his job looms large in Bob’s mind and it compels him to work long hours for meagre wages. He is too afraid to assert his rights or voice his grievance for fear of the repercussions. Further, Bob and his wife live in constant fear for the health and well-being of their son, Tiny Tim. Their inadequate income leaves them unable to afford the necessary medical care that could alleviate Tim’s suffering. Towards the end of the novel, Scrooge is deeply moved by their plight and similarly shares their fears for Tiny Tim’s health and extends a helping hand.

Throughout A Christmas Carol, Dickens presents fear as an agent for change in Scrooge, while for the character of Bob Cratchit, it serves to imprison him in his unfortunate circumstances. However, once Scrooge has undergone his transformation, he too shares Bob’s fears, and both are the better for it.

Commentary

  • Ensure you demonstrate a nuanced understanding of the text and maintain a critical style throughout 
  • Aim to give an assured personal response which demonstrates a high level of engagement with the text
  • Discerning references should be an integral part of your response so aim to make points with full support from the text

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Kate Lee

Author: Kate Lee

Kate has over 12 years of teaching experience as a Head of English and as a private tutor. Having also worked at the exam board AQA and in educational publishing, she's been writing educational resources to support learners in their exams throughout her career. She's passionate about helping students achieve their potential by developing their literacy and exam skills.