Remember, Paper 1 Question 5 is worth 40 marks, broken down into two Assessment Objectives:
AO5 (24 marks)
Communicate clearly, effectively and imaginatively, selecting and adapting tone, style and register for different forms, purposes and audiences
Organise information and ideas, using structural and grammatical features to support coherence and cohesion of texts
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AO6 (16 marks)
Use a range of vocabulary and sentence structures for clarity, purpose and effect, with accurate spelling and punctuation
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When planning your response, it is a good idea to keep the tone, style and register in mind, as well as the conventions of the form. Here, we will consider how you can produce an effective piece of descriptive writing with these devices in mind:
Tone
Descriptive writing should craft a tone of voice in keeping with the mood of the scene. This means your sentences should reflect the atmosphere. For example, if the scene is mysterious and frightening, your sentences should reflect this suspenseful mood.
In order to craft a tone in keeping with the mood of your description, consider how you can use sentence lengths and types:
- Short sentences reflect tension and unease, e.g. ‘No sound could be heard’
- Longer sentences and listing can create a sense of being overwhelmed, or of abundance, e.g. ‘The market was laden with apples, grapes, oranges, loaves of bread, chunks of cheese and every type of vegetable one could imagine.’
Style and register
The style of your descriptive writing is closely related to the language you use. For example, in a descriptive writing response, the best answers show evidence of careful word choice and the deliberate but judicious use of linguistic techniques.
Descriptive writing helps the reader to visualise the person, place, or situation being described. Your word choice and linguistic techniques should conjure a vivid, sensory impression in the reader’s mind.
The best way to do this is to:
- Use vocabulary which is useful to the reader:
- For example, describing something as ‘brilliant’ or ‘amazing’ is not descriptive
- Be specific and ambitious in your choice of adjectives
- Use sensory language to bring the scene to life:
- Focus not just on what can be seen, but also what can be heard, smelled or felt
- Emphasise key ideas or impressions using language techniques and imagery:
- For example, you could use a simile to create associations about size or colour
- Personification is a useful technique when describing weather or objects
- Ensure you describe the important details:
- For example, you do not need to describe every inch of a person or scene bit by bit, but instead focus on key features
Form
Descriptive writing is observational writing. This means the narrator does not interact and a character is not crafted. Descriptive writing is like imagining you are behind the lens of a camera. However, this does not mean the scene you are describing is static; it is important to note the movements and action you ‘witness’.
In order to adhere to the conventions of descriptive writing, it is best to:
- Plan your writing in an order which ‘moves’ through the scene
- The picture you are given is simply a stimulus
- It is best to use your imagination and describe this scene as it would appear in real life
- Descriptive writing does not provide background information or develop character interaction
- When describing people, focus on relevant details only
- You could focus on their body language or movements
- Sounds can be effective in crafting the mood, e.g. ‘shouts and shrieks’
- It is effective to repeat ideas related to colour
- Consider picking a key detail
- For example, the people could be wearing colourful hats
- By describing the hats, it is not necessary to describe the coats or shoes or trousers
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- Focus on using a range of interesting vocabulary; words like ‘amazing’ do not accurately describe places
- Include descriptive detail using a range of sensory language (sight, texture, sound)
- Avoid making your description into a story
- Write with technical accuracy (full stops, commas, sentence length, spelling, grammar)
- Vary sentence and paragraph lengths and types to keep the style and tone dynamic
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