This task will require you to produce a piece of writing based on the ideas and specific details you find in Text C. However, this does not mean just “re-telling” the text, quoting directly from the passage or repeating the details. You are being assessed on your ability to select relevant information from the text and then develop these details in the style of writing instructed. Importantly, this means that you should use clues and evidence in the text to help you make judgements about characters and situations, and then creatively expand on the details selected.
Your starting point will always be the bullet points in the question. These tell you what to focus on, and what you should highlight on Text C. Let’s look at the following example, about a student tour of the ancient Greek site of Delphi.
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Imagine that you are one of the students who visited Delphi. It is the evening of your visit and you have now returned to Athens.
Write a letter to your parents, telling them about your experiences so far.
In your letter you should include the following points:
- Details of your trip and your feelings about it before you visited Delphi
- Your thoughts and feelings about the visit to Delphi and about how your teacher reacted to it
- What you have learnt from your trip so far and why you would (or would not) recommend your parents to make a similar visit
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In this example, the task tells you to write from the point of view of a student on the tour, and the first bullet point indicates that you need to find details about the trip and the student’s feelings about it before visiting Delphi.
Let’s find this information in the first part of the passage. The narrator of the passage is the teacher (not the student), so we are going to need to use inference to work out information about the trip and the student’s feelings about it.
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Relevant details
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I took a look at my students and wondered if we should cancel the day trip to Delphi. We had been touring for seven days non-stop with every morning an early one; the students were visibly exhausted. Today I was tempted to give us all a break. We had already visited many of the ancient sites of Greece and Rome and we still had a week to go. Surely, we could skip Delphi, a site I was only vaguely familiar with, without causing undue harm to the students’ education? I knew they had wished for more time to hang out in the city, and the three-hour drive each way to Delphi and back sounded gruelling.
“Could we just stay here today?” I asked our guide, careful to stay out of earshot of the students.
“Sure.” He frowned. “But I think you should go.”
I didn’t want to disappoint him. “OK, then,” I said, “We’re going.” After all, it seemed unfair to deny the interested ones in the group the trek to Delphi.
“It’ll be fine,” I said, trying to convince myself as well as the students. “You can sleep on the bus.”
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- Touring for seven days non-stop
- Early mornings
- Students visibly exhausted
- Even the teacher was tempted to give everyone a break
- Already visited many of the ancient sites of Greece and Rome
- Still had a week to go
- Not that familiar with Delphi
- Students wanted more time to hang out in the city
- Three-hour drive each way to Delphi
- Teacher didn’t want to disappoint the guide
- Some of the students wanted to go
- Teacher thinks a solution is for the students to sleep on the bus
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Next, we need to “develop” those relevant details within the scope of the passage, and from the point of view of the “student”.
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Details
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Development
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Touring for seven days non-stop/early mornings/students visibly exhausted
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We were completely worn out. The trip so far had consisted of constant travelling with no down time whatsoever, and we hadn’t had a lie in all week. I know this seems hard to believe, but we’ve been up at 6am every morning!
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Even the teacher was tempted to give everyone a break
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Our teacher could see we were flagging, and we were hoping he would give us a bit of a break
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Already visited many of the ancient sites of Greece and Rome/still had a week to go
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We’d trekked around ancient monuments, crumbling temples and dusty ruins all week and we still had another week of ancient history to take in. It’s all been very interesting, but there are only so many mosaic floors to see
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Not that familiar with Delphi
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I wouldn’t mind, but who has even heard of Delphi? It’s hardly one of the more famous sites. I don’t think our education is going to suffer massively if we miss it out
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Students wanted more time to hang out in the city/three-hour drive each way to Delphi
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The city, however, is amazing! So many excellent shops and little cafes. Most of us wanted a bit of time to go shopping, and I really wanted to get you a lovely handmade tablecloth, as they are really pretty. It’s a three-hour drive each way to Delphi, so that would take away any time we might have had for shopping and sightseeing
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Teacher didn’t want to disappoint the guide/some of the students wanted to go/teacher thinks a solution is for the students to sleep on the bus
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But there were a couple in our group who really, really wanted to see Delphi, and I got the impression that our teacher didn’t want to disappoint our guide. So his brilliant solution was to sleep on the bus. This site had better be worth the effort!
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Each development point takes the relevant details from the passage and uses logical inferences, based on the information in the passage, to expand on the ideas in the student’s “voice”. The idea of a narrative voice will be explored further in the following section.
